editing poems

feedback is appreciated!  unless it is "ur stupid," which is just silly.  Because I will simply erase it-- and feel powerful doing so!

3:15 1-

her joy was in motion
tangible with magicks
knowing every creature
with all the movements
in the mystery of the reality
that bumblebees cannot fly
(scientifically speaking)



3:15 8-

Noise of falling rain
Falling stars- asteroids
That coldness spreading
the bottled-up energies
used to power our night images
those children of rational parents
who don't know what we all accept
the man on the moon is a dark woman
with hazel eyes and silver hair
wearing a twinkling black and starry dress
sending down those stars
just so we make wishes

3:15 12-
swish of freeway
wind maybe but
that air is cold
sound of coldness
sneaking into
warning all away

the warm cats
that knitted blanket
cozy cozy comfortable
shhh that hungry ghost sound
that cold liquid diet sound
maybe just a motorbike
because maybe maybe
it was the freeway
all a long

3:15 17-
industriously
the little ones build up
ward to the moon you
sing recycled materials
stacked up and up up
fused with only spit
and it only it were a little
cooler we'd be done

3:15 22-
ibuprofen
go to sleep
hate for you
as to weak
intensification
all your sisters
and all your brothers
and your family going back
seventeen generations back
all hated
this murderous intent
toward you and yours
all your kinfolk
not your fault (maybe)
that you someone
got this rep around you
having some influence
over those nerves
you nothing thing
stay in those damned bottles
and let you drown

3:15 26-
breathing lessons come to an end
fumes of the world enter and transform
combing themselves into pure thought.
but let's us give it back, mija,
throw it back to the ocean like a small fish
let go of this bit of something godly
we will find it all someday.